" Oh, you go up that path and then you will find some double doors. That is your new house." the driver tells me. " It's all fully furnished and everything." " OK?" I say, cautiously as I step out of the truck. As I walk down the path, moss squelches under my feet. I look behind me to see the truck but it is gone so I carry on up the path. Just when I think the path is never going to end I see some double doors. I open one of the doors a crack. " Hello?" I say quietly just in case anyone is there. No one answers. So I swing both doors open and try to find the light switch. When I find it I switch it on. " Gasp!"
By Iona
Left me wondering what is gonna happen
ReplyDeleteawsome I was wondering whats going to happen next I think that was the best story I've seen in a while Iona.There was some outstanding detail.
ReplyDeleteBy Oliver
nice it left me hanging on whats going to happen next good job you did a great
ReplyDeleteHannah Russell
It is great to see you using some lovely descriptive language. It really helps give the reader a clearer idea. Good job Iona. Miss Salter
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh! What happens when he goes through the double doors? The anticipation is a thriller. I can only imagine what he finds when he swings open the doors. Not sure what type of mysterious thriller this is, but I am hooked! I love these types of books and stories! You've got me on the edge of my seat!
ReplyDeleteMattie @ Buyer's Corner Realty
My goodness, what have you bought or rented?! It looks like a castle rather than a house! Anyway, it's magnificent. If I were surrounded by such an atmospheric place, I wouldn't mind sleeping on the floor if it wasn't furnished. I can't wait to hear the denouement to your story and find out more about how you came across such a place.
ReplyDeleteGlenn @ MMTeam